Shane's adventure

[Merata]

Like anounced, here is the start of the revised story. I'll try to post a new chapter every new week, if I can't I'll notify you guys.

To keep things clear and prevent people searching for chapter I'll post the links to the chapters here.

Chapters.
Chapter 1
Chapter 2

Short prologue/summary.
Will be posted as soon as possible.

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[Secad MS]

This sounds like an interesting story, but one could understand things like tone if you added punctuation. For example,

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[Merata]

I always seem to make those mistakes, but I'll read through it and put up a new version asap.

Anyway thanks for the criticism.

 

[Merata]

Sorry that it took a bit longer then expected, but here is chapter two

Also the first posts lay-out will be updated anytime soon.
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