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Ryder's Journey: Ryder Blackwell's Journey 1

by EmoKitty21

EmoKitty21 This is a story of a young man and his struggle to find himself with his lot in life. This is part one of this series. Let me know what you guys think of this as it a story that I am doing that does not have any ties to an RP.
It was a very trying time for Ryder, he had been trying to get out on his own for a long time ago. Though he was someone who came off as very confident when he speaks, he is actually very insecure when it comes to somethings. Ryder had spent a long time trying to get over the loss of his grandmother, as they had been very close.

Ryder had grown up with his grandmother as the only person who took care of him. Yeah he had his parents, but they seemed to take more interest in his sister then him. His grandma was someone who took his side when he was pushed under the rug by his parents in favor of his sister.

Hannah was not someone who was very kind to her brother. It all started when she was born a year after Ryder. You would think that the two siblings were close in age, they would be good friends, but that is not the case with Hannah and Ryder. Hannah was not a very kind individual. She was the one who had caused a lot of trouble for Ryder.

At every birthday that Ryder had, Hannah had to have a present and cake of her own. She was not happy with her brother being the center of attention. It happened for every birthday that he had, even when they were old enough to be able to understand what was going on with the parties. Whenever Ryder would get a new toy that Hannah wanted, their parents would make him give it to her. Ryder never really had anything that was his own.

Ryder is now eighteen, and ready to embark on a new journey of his own. He had gotten into a great collage, and thanks to his grandmother, he was able to go. She had started a fund for him before his was born for his collage, and she had put in a lot of money into the account. It was able to pay for his collage, and he would be able to graduate debt free.

So with a heavy heart, he started collage in his grandmother's honor. Will he be able to live up to the example that she set for him all of those years? He hoped he could do it as she would have wanted him to continue on without her, though he did not know how he could deal with the loss of one of the only family members who cared about him.
  1. RenzFlintrock
    Overall, preety good! A few small mistakes, but I like it in general.
    Feb 14, 2020
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  2. EmoKitty21
    @Hecotoro, Cinderella was one of the inspirations for this story. The second part is up as well and should be linked to this one. I plan on trying to write on everyday as I want to improve my writing, so for me this is a way to learn by doing. I hope by this time next year I am better then what I am at this moment in time. I really want to build up the story to be more, but it is a work in progress for me as I am just letting my mind run and write what comes to me.
    Feb 14, 2020
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  3. Hecotoro
    Sorry I can't really give good feedback since I still don't know where this is going. Maybe after reading more about it. So far I just got a small glimpse of who Ryder is and his relationship to his sister. Kinda reminds me of Cinderella.
    Feb 14, 2020
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  4. EeviumZ
    This is really good! =D
    Feb 14, 2020
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  5. ThePlayfulFox
    Ryder *was* now eighteen.
    It is a very simple mistake, and a common one. But you dropped the past tense for present. I'm guilty of this as well, but I wanted to alert you of this.
    Feb 14, 2020
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  6. EmoKitty21
    Feb 14, 2020
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